Ashlee asked: On a scale of one to ten how bad would rate my writing?
I love writing and i’m writing a Ouran High fanfic.. well just wondering on a scale to one
Scale
1 TERRIBLE
2. Horrible
3.Very Bad
4. Bad
5. Not bad, but not good
6.Okay
7. Good(I think it’s this one)
8. Awesome
9.Excellent
10. BEST THING EVER
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PLEASE NOTE: This is just a rough draft so it may has some grammar errors
Hikaru emerged from the black limousine. He walked into the mansion and was welcomed by one of the maids, ”Right this way sir” Hikaru just simply nodded and followed the maid. She took him to the main living room, where he saw Kaoru, Kyoya, and Hunny. He looked around the room confused. ”What’s going on?” He asked Kyoya. Kyoya simply ignored him, and so Hikaru just went and sat beside Hunny.
Kyouya adjusted his glasses. ”Do you all know why i have called you here today?” They all shook their heads as Kyoya raised his left eyebrow, ”None of you have any idea what’s going on?” Once again, they all shook their heads. Kyoya let out a deep sigh, ”Tamaki is dead and none of you know about this?”
”W..What? Is this a joke?” Hikaru said His face began to grow pale, and his mind went blank.
Kyouya said it once again, ”No. Would you really think i would joke for anyone’s death?”
”H..How? Why? This is just so.. sudden” Kaoru said while looking at Kyouya.
Kyoya let out a annoyed sigh, ”You idiots! How can you not of known of this?”
Kyouya turned to Mitsunki and noticed he had tears in his eyes, ”But when and..” Hunny said as his tears grew bigger, ”How did..” He sniffed, ”How and when did he die?”
Kyouya sighed for a third time, ”He died this morning, of excessive bleeding in his chest. He was shot” The whole mansion was quiet now and all that was heard was the sobbing from Hunny.
”Here, have a tissue” One of the maids said to Hunny.
”Thank you” Hunny said while he grabbed the tissue and blew into it. His eyes glanced the room as he did that. He looked at Hikaru who looked as if he were about to start sobbing as well. His face was pale and he could hear him say, ”Tamaki..” under his breath. He looked at Kaoru who looked shock. And then looked at Kyouya who had his usually mask on which was showing no signs of emotion.
”But he has a little girl! Kotoko! What about Kotoko? What about his daughter? She loves him so much!” Hunny stated as he got another tissue from the maid and blew into it, ”She’s only five! I.. I feel so bad for her!”
”And Haruhi..She’s pregnant again with twins. His twin daughters” Hikaru added
”Do you think Haruhi knows what happen?” Kaoru asked while looking at Kyouya
Kyouya turned and looked at him, he nodded, ”Yes. She was his wife, of course she was going to be the first to be told the news”
”Have you talked to her?” Kaoru asked curiously
Kyouya just shook his head, ”No, I don’t want to bother her. Her husband just died, she needs some alone time with her daughter and they need time to cope with it” He looked at Kaoru, Hikaru, and Hunny and gave them what seemed to be a death glare, ”So, don’t even think about going and trying to talk to her right now. Like i said, her husband just died and she needs some alone time with her daughter and they need time to cope with it”
Hunny sniffed as he grabbed his stuffed rabbit, ”Poor Tama Chan he was still so young. He wasn’t even in his thirties..” He hugged his rabbit tighter, ” And poor Haruhi and poor…” He sniffed again, ”And poor Kotoko!” He grabbed his rabbit as he thought about her, ”I.. I just feel so bad for her! She loved Tamaki so much”
Hikaru was a person who could not start sobbing easily. Even when horribles tragedies such as death occured he never once shed a tear. It was not that he was cruel, heartless, or was selfish, it was just that.. it never really hit him very hard. But as he thought of Tamaki’s daughter; Kotoko and how much she loved him, his tears came quickly. It was the first time in his life that he had sobbed
for someone’s passing but he did not stop himself. His tears continued to run down his face, and he rested his head aganist his arm, ”But why now? Why did he have to die now? He has a pregnant wife and a little girl..” He quietly said to himself.
Kyouya just sighed as he shook his head, ”What an idiot…” He began, ”He goes and gets himself when his wife is
Oh sorry lol. Like i said, there might be some errors i already saw some typos.. haha xD